食品安全英语作文100字(2022年雅思写作外教范文)

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你好呀,我是来自加拿大的雅思外教Mac。今天,给大家带来一个雅思大作文真题(2021年7月29日,大陆真题)的范文。

老规矩,以下是正文目录:

1,题目

2,审题

3,高分范文

4,范文朗读

5,范文地道词汇中英对照,包括:

题目改述原因+观点类大作文高分句型展示“词汇丰富度”的词汇&短语展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇&句型

上题:

Today, food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

审题:

Type: Reason & Opinion 原因+观点 (我的观点:generally positive)

Body 1: demand and improved logisticsBody 2: overall, positive trend as it allows the consumer more choice

We know this is part opinion essay because we have to talk about the “trend”, and give an answer to whether it is positive or negative. Deciding on whether a “trend” or “development” is positive or negative is subjective in nature, as it depends on the perspective of the opinion-maker, in this case, you. Generally, there are only two possible opinions that can be given. It is overall positive, or it is overall negative. This is NOT the type of essay where we will use “in equal measure”.

Also, recognize that this IS NOT the same as the “do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages” essay question type, and it is totally different from the “what are the advantages and disadvantages” essay.

Make sure you are clear on this point, otherwise you risk not satisfying the Task Response.

- Model Answer 高分范文 & 范文朗读 -

▲范文音频戳这里▲

These days, fresh produce, fruit, and meats are transported thousands of kilometers from the source to the end-user. This essay shall examine the reasons for this phenomenon, along with an explanation as to why I think this is, overall, a beneficial development.

One of the main reasons for why fresh foodstuffs can be, and are, transported from distant locations, is because logistical technology has been greatly improved. Not just the vehicles, such as trucks and rail freight, have evolved, but also the actual logistics for ensuring seamless transport. This factor allows for fresh foods to be moved continuously in their journey towards the final market, and this is made possible by communication technologies that allow farmers, buyers, freight forwarders, distributors and retailers to communicate seamlessly, and to monitor and track shipments. Thus, this ensures non-local fresh food products brought to market satisfy another major reason for this phenomenon of food traveling from afar, namely that of consumer demand.

Accordingly, it is the consumer, who it can be said, most benefits from this ability to transport farm products over long distances. With rising disposable incomes, consumers also have witnessed a widening preference for different foods that are not grown, or bred, locally, and with the concurrence of rapid transport development, allows for these taste and dietary demands to be met. where previously it would have been difficult to purchase exotic tropical fruits in a far northern city, today this is no longer the case. Not unexpectedly, the myriad entities involved in food growing and shipping also greatly benefit, and this goes towards increasing economic activity over a wide region. Conversely, local farmers may suffer some negative impact from such a situation, but overall, effects are mostly positive.

In conclusion, with higher standards of living, consumers drive the demand for greater varieties of food, and simultaneously, the logistics industry has developed sufficiently to satisfy this demand. In my opinion, I believe this to be a positive development as it benefits greatly the diets and preferences of consumers, and meanwhile, spreads the economic benefits throughout different regions of the world.

- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

- (1) Introduction

These days, fresh produce, fruit, and meats are transported thousands of kilometers from the source to the end-user. This essay shall examine the reasons for this phenomenon, along with an explanation as to why I think this is, overall, a beneficial development.

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 题目改述:

Today = these daysFood (from the farm) = fresh produce (meaning vegetables), fruit, and meats (the implication of these is from the farm)"foods" suggests “farms”Travels = transported(Thousands) of miles (meaning from far away) = thousands of kilometersto the consumer = to the end-user

Standard Phrase for the “Reason + Opinion” type essay “原因+观点”类大作文高分句型:

This essay shall examine the reasons for this phenomenon, along with an explanation as to why I think this is, overall, a beneficial development.

- (2) Body 1 -

Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到:

Why is this? (food travels thousands of miles)

One of the main reasons for why fresh foodstuffs can be, and are, transported from distant locations, is because logistical technology has been greatly improved. Not just the vehicles, such as trucks and rail freight, have evolved, but also the actual logistics for ensuring seamless transport. This factor allows for fresh foods to be moved continuously in their journey towards the final market, and this is made possible by communication technologies that allow farmers, buyers, freight forwarders, distributors and retailers to communicate seamlessly, and to monitor and track shipments. Thus, this ensures non-local fresh food products brought to market satisfy another major reason for this phenomenon of food traveling from afar, namely that of consumer demand.

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型:

One of the main reasons for why…, is because

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语

fresh foodstuffs 新鲜食品logistical technology 供应链技术;物流技术has been greatly improved 极大的提升trucks and rail freight 卡车和铁路货运have evolved 发展了the actual _____ for ensuring (method used to introduce subject of next sentence)buyers, freight forwarders, distributors, and retailers (showing specific vocabulary) (这几个词展示了特定领域的词汇量) 买方,货运方,经销商,零售商monitor and track shipments (logistics vocabulary “物流”相关词汇) 监测和追踪物流satisfy (a demand) 满足(需求)from afar 来自远方consumer demand 消费者需求

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

can be, and are, (showing the ‘ability’ and also the ‘fact’ of something)Not just, such as, but alsoThis factor allows for, and this is made possible bythat allowThus, this ensuresanother major reason for this, namely that of (phrase to replace the previous object) (another major reason for this = consumer demand— = ‘satisfy consumer demand’)

- (3) Body 2 -

Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到:

a positive or negative trend

Accordingly, it is the consumer, who it can be said, most benefits from this ability to transport farm products over long distances. With rising disposable incomes, consumers also have witnessed a widening preference for different foods that are not grown, or bred, locally, and with the concurrence of rapid transport development, allows for these taste and dietary demands to be met. where previously it would have been difficult to purchase exotic tropical fruits in a far northern city, today this is no longer the case. Not unexpectedly, the myriad entities involved in food growing and shipping also greatly benefit, and this goes towards increasing economic activity over a wide region. Conversely, local farmers may suffer some negative impact from such a situation, but overall, effects are mostly positive.

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型:

Accordingly (= ‘correspondingly’)

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语:

disposable incomes 可支配收入have witnessed a widening preference 拥有更广的选择the concurrence of rapid transport development 与快速发展的运输一起taste and dietary demands 口味和饮食需求to be met 满足exotic tropical fruits 异国的热带水果is no longer the case 不是那样了myriad 大量的entities 机构;对象;实体food growing and shipping 食品的种植和运输increasing economic activity 经济活动增长may suffer some negative impact 可能会受到消极影响from such a situation 从这种情况

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

Accordingly,, whothis, or, locally,and with, allows for thesewhere previously it would have beenNot unexpectedly, ( = ‘of course’)Also, and this goes towardsConversely,from such a situation, but overall,mostly

- (4) Conclusion -

In conclusion, with higher standards of living, consumers drive the demand for greater varieties of food, and simultaneously, the logistics industry has developed sufficiently to satisfy this demand. In my opinion, I believe this to be a positive development as it benefits greatly the diets and preferences of consumers, and meanwhile, spreads the economic benefits throughout different regions of the world.

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型:

In conclusion,In my opinion, I believe this to be a positive development as it benefits…

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语:

standards of living 生活水平drive the demand for 驱动……的需求greater varieties of 更加多样化simultaneously 同时the logistics industry 物流行业has developed sufficiently to 充分发展

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

, with, and simultaneously,this, and meanwhile,throughout

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